Thursday, September 13, 2018

Rapunzel story sentence



To his horror, the fairy was standing there.

Changed:
To his fright a tall rag wearing young girl came out of nowhere . She stood tall and had an angry face, as if she would kill him. She had scars covering her face and a black eye. He took a step back in.

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